Return of the Wind

[Deepwaters]

This will be a two-part poem. Part I is below. Part II will wait until Alizée's new single is released.

Return of the Wind (Part I)

Beneath the trees, sand piled in rounds at the edge of a pond,
Leaves nestled still and secure, rotting at their hidden sides,
The water lay perfect, glassy-smooth; one would have thought a stone
Would bounce, not skip, upon that bright, hard, blemishless expanse,
But for the languid burp of bubbles above a grumpy croaking frog,
That waited for some grace, who could tell what, or how?
<O
Lovers walked beneath those trees, fingers entwined,
Only from habit, hair glued to their faces by sweat,
Eyes to the ground before their feet by ennui.
Not the least breeze stirred leaf or sand or hair,
Nor any breath of passion any heart.
Had the wind died?
Had we forgotten?
Had the fire died?
Or held we still the embers,
Banked against the day the wind returned?
<O
It is quiet without the wind. Safe, as death is safe,
Or a heart empty of love that cannot break, or embers buried
Beyond the reach of anything to burn. Each hair in place,
Clothing demure of wrinkle or dust, we amble reassured,
If purposeless, save for a few, mad-eyed and shorn of sense,
Who howl by the waterside a hymn to the returning storm.
<O
What is this song those ragged prophets chant? What dream
Has scourged their placid brains to such mad trains of thought?
Do they – could they, cry for the shattering of calm perfection,
Cry in magic tongues of summoning across the lazy shore,
Hoarse incantations ripping through the calm?
Is their call heard?
Do you hear song?
Is that a whisper?
Is it just the frog complaining,
Or thunder of the drums heard through the skin?

[nurvonic]

hmm interesting. good job!

[thats amazazazing]

ahahahaaha

[Deepwaters]

Originally Posted by thats amazazazing

ahahahaaha

I think I just found that frog.

[espire]

Until you make up a tune to that, I'm not one for poetry.

[Fusoya]

Impressive!
How long did it take to write it?

[espire]

Originally Posted by espire

Until you make up a tune to that, I'm not one for poetry.

But I realize that that probably sounded quite mean

I'll rephrase that: After reading a little bit of it, even though I'm not one poetry, I realize that we need a tune for it right away!

[Deepwaters]

LOL thanks Espire but I can't think how it would scan for song lyrics.

I wrote it over two days. I guess the first draft took me about three hours, then I spent another couple of hours the next day going over it and tweaking.

[Uméesha]

deep waters really this is amazing.... i thought you were gone deep thinking while writing this "return of the wind"! as we go deep deep deeper into the sea.... we can find many fishes, corals, scenary ect... with all the good things inside the sea like wise your writing say's a beautiful thoughts to me really great... i like it.... i like it.... i like the people writings.....

[fsquared]

Actually, I wonder if a quiet acoustic guitar folk melody could work, with a little reduplication at

"Had the wind died?...etc" as a chorus. Thoughts?